Wednesday, May 18, 2011

How could I improve my blog?

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24 comments:

  1. Drewt5May 18, 2011 at 12:00 PM

    I DONT THINK YOU NEED TO CHANGE ANYTHING.

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  2. JacobK6May 18, 2011 at 4:40 PM

    I agree with Drew I don't see anything wrong with it I think it looks great.

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  3. meghanm1May 18, 2011 at 4:42 PM

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  4. meghanm1May 18, 2011 at 4:44 PM

    I would give more voice to it feels like i am reading from a texted book, but over all it was really good

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  5. kateb6May 18, 2011 at 5:13 PM

    I thought you did really good on this. There's nothing really to improve on

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  6. TMeek6May 18, 2011 at 5:48 PM

    I think you could have improved on using your personality in your writing. There was a ton of detail but there wasn't much of you in it.

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  7. clarkP2May 18, 2011 at 6:33 PM

    I think you mabey could have some more voce in your blog but you did great.

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  8. OliviaG5May 18, 2011 at 8:19 PM

    Great blog! But I agree with everyone else! The only thing you cold really improve on would be having more voice.

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  9. MeaganC2May 18, 2011 at 8:26 PM

    I think you could have used more voice, but over all this blog was AMAZING!

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  10. Mia G2May 18, 2011 at 9:15 PM

    This blog was great! but everone else is right. You need more voice!

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  11. ParkerA5May 18, 2011 at 9:26 PM

    Your blog was great but you never explained what a bailey was.

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  12. Kristens6May 18, 2011 at 10:10 PM

    I don't really think you need to change anything, but you might have needed to use a little more voice.

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  13. Kristens6May 18, 2011 at 10:12 PM

    I think you did a great job, but you might need a little more voice.

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  14. Maddyb5May 18, 2011 at 10:24 PM

    This is a good blog but maybe you could add some other colors than just blue. but you also need more voice.

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  15. Lynnb2May 18, 2011 at 11:24 PM

    This blog contained lots of great information. You can really learn a lot from reading it! However, I think a little more voice added to it would help it sound more interesting. content wise it had just about everything!!! Great job!!!

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  16. Lynnb2May 18, 2011 at 11:28 PM

    This blog contains a lot of great information, you can really learn a lot from it. However, adding a little more voice would have made it a little more interesting. Content wise, it had just about everything!!! Great blog!!!

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  17. cadew6May 19, 2011 at 12:24 AM

    your blog could have used a little more detail. Especially in the weapon post.

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  18. Lynnb2May 19, 2011 at 5:24 AM

    This blog contains a lot of great information. However, you can make your blog more interesting by adding more voice. Content wise, you had just about everything!!! Great blog!!!

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  19. Drews2May 19, 2011 at 6:38 AM

    I don't think you need to change anything about your blog!

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  20. FrankieD4May 19, 2011 at 8:15 AM

    I like EVERYTHING you did! Nice work!(:

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  21. VivianB2May 19, 2011 at 8:34 AM

    I liked your blog and it was hard to pick one thing to change. If I had to I would say you could've used just a little bit more voice. Other than that the blog was awesome.

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  22. TuckerH4May 19, 2011 at 10:26 AM

    Everthing was great except one thing. One thing i thought you could improvwe was how long your paragraphs were!

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  23. FrankieD4May 19, 2011 at 10:39 AM

    I agree!! a little bit more voice, but over all, NICE WORK!!(:

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  24. jpp4May 19, 2011 at 2:15 PM

    I agree with Drew I don't see anything wrong with it I think it looks great i also agree with FrankieD4 maybe a little more voice.

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